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Post by Anubite on May 12, 2005 14:57:56 GMT -5
Im finnaly writing a fic...but I suck at writing so
please dont laugh...hey at least my titals good ;D.
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Post by Anubite on May 12, 2005 14:59:17 GMT -5
by theway this is going to be k ;)inda short.
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Post by Platform Master on May 12, 2005 16:56:46 GMT -5
Good.is this a short story?
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Post by Anubite on May 12, 2005 17:06:41 GMT -5
yes, but thats only the first chapter.
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Post by Platform Master on May 12, 2005 17:19:19 GMT -5
Wha? That's no chapter.........
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Post by Shauna on May 12, 2005 17:23:00 GMT -5
No offence, but that isn't a chapter. I know my chapter's weren't that long, but... Anyway, it seemed that at the end it could have been continued. It just had a feel to it that it culd have went on.  |
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Post by Anubite on May 13, 2005 14:29:10 GMT -5
prolouge--A dark awakening A dark creature stirred from its sleep.
It had felt something, a cold feeling,as if
it was being drawn to something.That feeling
was what it feels like to be sucked into
anothers body by way of force. |
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Post by Anubite on May 13, 2005 14:30:45 GMT -5
fixed it!!!! is that better??!??!
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Post by Platform Master on May 13, 2005 15:58:23 GMT -5
Kinda...................
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Post by Naughty-O on May 13, 2005 16:01:39 GMT -5
It needs to be MUCH longer.  |
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Post by Shauna on May 13, 2005 16:02:17 GMT -5
Well, I guess it's prologue... Can you not make it a little bit longer? |
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Post by Naughty-O on May 13, 2005 16:06:37 GMT -5
Well, I guess it's prologue... Can you not make it a little bit longer? It's only 5 lines.... The content s good thoug. |
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Post by Anubite on May 15, 2005 10:20:06 GMT -5
Chapter 1------The arising of Dark Jak That dark creature was Zarak one of the sev-en dark eco lords of the underworld.At the moment
he was being teleported at avery high speed to what
he thought was a child.He sensed as he was dra-
wing closer that it was a boy,a mere 18 years old.Sudd-
enly he was there,dark eco cackeling all around him.
He angrily broke free of the boys restrainments
with a quick and powerfull dark eco shockwave.
Zarak felt himself growing weaker and the boys
soul growing stronger,as he tore away from
him...he was back in the underworld.While
he was in the room in the boys soul he
had sensed his name...Jak.From that day on
Zakar became known as Dark Jak. |
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Post by Anubite on May 15, 2005 10:27:57 GMT -5
I wrote that chapter in class when I was supposed to
be doing some stupid worksheet.
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Post by Shauna on May 15, 2005 11:48:29 GMT -5
Once again, no offence meant or anything... but, that is not a chapter...
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